HKCEE past paper-writing 1998-2008

HKDSE writing sample paper

HKDSE英文科點計分?

english subject in HKDSE 考咩?

改會考writing卷

今年出去MARK會考WRITING卷, 以下是我的學習:


(每part最高6分,共四part: content, language, organisation, genre．最高24分)

1.關於 marking scheme

Content可以俾的COMMENT:

-interesting article. Fulfils tasks completely. Imaginative anecdote. (6)

-variety of points well developed. Relaying personal experience. But lacks real interest/ humor of magazine article (5)

-fulfils tasks. Clear premise established. Ends clearly. Lack real interest/humor for magazine(5)

-fulfils tasks-personal experience leading to conclusion-lacks in real interest/humor of mag article (4)

-variety of points well-developed. All relevant except 2^nd last para. (5)

-limited no. of points-partially developed.generally relevant but just of good points-no real personal change. (3)

-irrelevant para. There are ideas in ..but limited and not related to personal change. (2)

-premise of tasks set up by coping prompt. (2)

-difficult to judge. (1)

-inadequate but have 2 or 3 very rudimentary prompts, therefore more than 0. (1)

LANGUAGE可以俾的COMMENT:

-grammatical errors, but slips. Impressive control of wide variety of structures and phrases. Use of vocab for deliberate effect. (6)

-some sophisticated lexis(字). Some repetition. One sentence difficult to understand. (5)

-good use of phrases, but quite frequent errors(4)

-quite frequent errors-switch in tenses affects understanding. Good vocab but not really sophisticated to get five. (4)

-quite frequent errors, but at no point affecting understanding. Vocab tends to be used accurately. (4)

-struggle to make sense of most sentences. V. frequent errors, occasionally good phrase. (3)

-extremely simple repetitive structures, frequent errors but don’t’ affect understanding. Vocab simple. (2)

-even simple sentences have errors very often affecting understanding. Occasional good vocab. (2)

-language severely hamper understanding but occasional easily understandable part, so not 0. (1)

-a series of phrases. No real evidence of ability to construct sentence. (0)

Organisation可以俾的comment:

-overall structure excellent. Additional coda(結尾). Good use of reference nouns and demonstratives. (6)

-overall structure clear. Some good communicate use, but repetitive. Faulty pronoun. (4)

-overall structure good. Some faulty connectives. (4)

-good intro- set up premise. Overall clear chronological structure. Paragraph 5 a bit illogical. Text unfinished. (4)

-discernable paras: intro, body and conclusion. Attempts at topic sentences. Limited connectives used. (3)

-heading generally helps but last one faculty. There is intro and conclusion. Within paras like unconnected sentences. (2)

-intro but vague. Limited use of connectives. (2)

-there are 3 paras. Attempts of connectives. Within para very difficult to understand connectives between sentences. (1)

-a series of notice-like phrases.(0)

GENRE可以俾的COMMENT:

-read like article. Tone informal. Reference to audience and to self. Use of hyperpole (誇張手法) (6)

-strong personal account, but no real indication that this is more an essay than an article (4)

-Reasonably convincing. Direct reference to readers. Interactional, but sometimes inappropriate. (5)

-some seen mga feature-including reference to ……(4)

-overall str. and paras. Clear-though rather simplistic. Some good connectives, other cohesion faulty. (4)

-quite personal. But little evidence of candidates doing anything more than normal essay. (3)

-no real awareness of audience. Though use of headings appropriate. (2)

-no awareness of audience or text type. But rest reads like article more than letter, so 1 or 0. (1)

-no real attempt to create mag article. But does establish role, so not 0. (1)

-no discernable features or audience awareness for us to understand. (0)

2. 關於改卷進度

大致上, 1小時可改到20篇. 有時快,可改到30篇. 但多過30篇, 準確度會低些.

3. Good vocab

-affiliate themselves with  (

-unfortunate never comes singly

-a range of

-out of blue

-prerequisite

-in retrospect

-all too (used before an adjective or adverb to emphasize a negative meaning

e.g. The holidays flew by all too quickly. )

-embark on (start sth new)

-call a spade a spade (to say the truth about something, even if it is not polite or pleasant )

-admittedly

-permeate (e.g. Dissatisfaction with the government seems to have permeated every section of society. )

-in hope of

-there is no exaggeration to say …

-ubiquitous (seeming to be in all places)

-irrespective of (without considering; not needing to allow for)

-by and large (when everything about a situation is considered together

e.g. There are a few small things that I don't like about my job, but by and large it's very enjoyable. )

-keep abreast of (to make sure you know all the most recent facts about a subject or situation e.g. I try to keep abreast of any developments.)

-worse still 更糟糕的是

-heighten (to increase or make something increase, especially an emotion or effect

)

-to name a few=for example

-formidable 可怕的 (a formidable task)

-to my despair

-mesmerize (to have someone's attention completely so that they cannot think of anything else )

4. Common grammar mistakes

-we no need to X (we need not/do not need to)

-feel boring X(feel bored)

-discuss aboutX (discuss)

-it was trouble X(it was troublesome)

-feel exciting X ( feel excited)

-give up to buy X (give up buying)

- I won’t late X ( I won’t be late)

5. common spelling mistakes

-image X(imagine )

-nowaday/ now a days X(nowadays)

-I thing that X (I think that)

-sizes X (sides)

-fine X (fine)

-loss e.g I loss a mobile phone. X(lose)

-vedio X (video)

-frist X (first)

-cheat X (chat)

-surface X( surfing)

-contect X (contact)

-convenience X (convenient)

-text X (test)

-readed X (read)

每日一正音

itinerary /aɪˈtɪn. ə r. ə r.i/ /-ə.rer-/ noun [ C ]

a detailed plan or route of a journey

(呢個字有5個音, 雖然係弱音,但都要讀出: ne. ra. ry) 

Hong Kong tourist spots

Name: _____________

Class: ________________(    )

S.4 writing revision 1

If you net-friend from Australia comes to Hong kong, which three places will you bring him/her to go? Draw the three places in the boxes below:

Revision on the names of the scenic spots (旅遊景點) in Hong Kong.

迪士尼樂園 ____________ _____________ ________________

海洋公園 ___________________ ___________________

天壇大佛 ___________________ ___________________

廟街 ___________________ ___________________

女人街 ___________________ ___________________

山頂凌霄閣 The  ___________________  ___________________

淺水灣  ___________________  ___________________

青馬大橋  The  ______________  ___________________  ________________

長洲___________________  ___________________

大嶼山___________________  ___________________

尖沙咀_________________ _________________ ___________________

旺角___________________ ___________________

深水埗_________________ __________________ ___________________

中環 The ___________________

油麻地___________________ ___________________ ___________________

Name: _________________

Class: ________________ (   )

S.4 writing revision 2

Now you have decided the three places you will bring your net-friend to go. However, you are not free as you need to go to school. You decided to write him an email to introduce the three places to him/her and tell him/her how to get there.

You can use the following table to summarise the three places you recommend 推介 him/her to go and how to get there.

Places	Why it is worth visiting (為何值得參觀? )	How to get there
1.
2.
3.

worksheet on complaint letter

Name: __________________

Class:________________ (    )

s.4 complaint letter: Vocabulary

1. adjectives about the product/ service

無禮 ______________________

不負責任 ______________________

幫不到忙 ______________________

嘔心______________________

嚴重______________________

恐佈 ______________________

令人煩擾的 ______________________

不能容忍的 ______________________

有瑕疵的______________________

2. verbs/ adjectives about your feeling

不高興的______________________

因…不滿意的 ______________________ ______________________

因…失望的______________________ ______________________

因….生氣的______________________ ______________________

                                                       

3. verb phrases used to ask for compensation (補償)

改善情況 _____________________  _______________ ___________________

調查問題_____________________ _____________ the ______________________

更換______________________

維修 ______________________

退錢 ____________________ my ______________________

Opening

I am writing to complain about +

A. the product/ B. the service /C. the company +

which + VO

e.g. I am writing to complain about  ______________________________________(the product)

which______________________________________________________

Ending

1. 退錢 I demand ____________________________________________________

_____________________________________________________________________

2. 更換 If you do not  _________________________________________________

_____________________________________________________________________

3. 要求改善  I strongly urge you _________________________________________

_____________________________________________________________________

alliteration

中三TSA會問人英語修辭技巧, 尤其常見有alliteration 和personalification. 我用了明報英語網有篇文內的例子向學生解釋:

李麗娟專欄：Alliteration頭韻

Publishing Date: 2010/3/18

【明報專訊】寫了兩三次關於acronym（首字母縮略字）及simple English的稿，有朋友建議我舉些我喜歡及有趣的alliteration（頭韻）例子，因alliteration用得恰當，往往增加用詞的效力，亦可以幫助初學英文的學生訓練發音。小學的時候，最喜歡朗誦以下全部用alliteration的「打油詩」：

Peter Piper picked a peck of pickled pepper / A peck of pickled pepper Peter Piper picked / If Peter Piper picked a peck of pickled pepper / Where's the peck of pickled pepper Peter Piper picked?

請也試試朗誦這首詩，你可能發覺其中樂趣。若用錯「懶音」，P字好容易會讀成B字的。

很多作家想用簡單而有力的題目或字眼來描寫某些時代的人物，也常用alliteration。還記得有hippies（嬉皮士）、Joan Baez及初發明避孕丸的60年代嗎？有人喜歡描寫那「大解放」的10年為swinging sixties，半世後我們還是用這alliteration形容這年代，貼切不過。70年代的光彩風華則用sensational seventies（又一alliteration）去描寫，也是一絕。

年齡上，我剛好度過了10年flaming fifties（美國著名女作家Gail Sheehy用此alliteration來描寫要出色地度過更年期的婦女），現在希望輕鬆愉快地度過我的swinging sixties。但有幾個踏入70歲這關頭的女朋友，我不能不提，因她們見證了sensational seventies這講法，她們就是我最欣賞的陳方安生（Anson）、陸方寧生（Ninson）姊妹，以及我的良師益友鄧蓮如勳爵（Lydia）。

Anson及Lydia對香港公績上的貢獻已毋須介紹，我在此除了再說感激及佩服外，更想借用她倆出色的外表、性格及人生哲學來證實70來歲的人，無論男或女（男的我會以梁智鴻、李鵬飛作例子）都可以繼續作另類「模」（即俗語說「仔」的「模範」！），繼續sensational下去。Ninson也不遑多讓，在旅遊界叱吒風雲後，在商界再顯神通。她們三人的passion：passion for people, passion for public service, passion for private enterprise（希望這個alliteration用得恰當）是時下青年可借鏡的，也是她們幾名長青樹的秘訣。

歸根究柢，成功地做人、做事真是要具備積極的人生哲學及懂得維持健康的體魄。Life depends on the liver這又是alliteration，又是pun（雙關語）。Pun的用法下回再介紹 。這一句是中英文都特別出色的前上司徐淦老師常用的，勉勵我們做人做事都要靠健康的身體及正確的人生觀方可成功。徐老師也剛過了sensational seventies，正享受他的enterprising eighties，不時繼續教導我們。

懂得用alliteration來加強英文字句的力度，往往都奏效的。希望以下的忠告：Don't Do Drugs，也會對年輕人有所警惕，遠離毒品！

文：李麗娟

linking words exercise

answers: 

1. to begin with

2. in addition

3. furthermore

4. and

5. if

6. for instance

7. on the other hand

8. to sum up

9. as

10. such as

11. what's more

12. despite the fact that 

13. however

14. so that

15. when 

每日一正音:jewellery

jewellery 
/ˈdʒuː. ə l.ri/ noun [ U ] (留意silent e和 ew讀 /uː/)