arguementative/expository

arguementative/expository:

1. introduction:


   a. When asked about...., many people say that....but others believe that ...

   b. When it comes to ...some people believe that ... There is probably some truth in their statement, but I think quite differently. c..... opinions vary widely. Some view ... as ... while others claim that....

2. reason paragraph:

a. ....can account for....'

b. among the most convincing reasons cited by people for the ..is c.

3. examples:

a. take , for example, ....

b. take a look at...

c. Consider the cased of ...

d. no one can deny the fact that ....

4 conclusion:

a. From what has been discussed above, we may conclude that ....

b. taking into account of all three factors, we may reasonably draw the conclusion that....

c.judging form the above, it is obvious that ....

20年HKCEE writing past paper analysis

20年HKCEE writing past paper analysis

分年份
1988

1. news story
2. letter: descriptive
3. argumentative
4. article: descriptive

1989

1. reply letter to father
2. picture story
3. story
4. article: report

1990

1. letter to give advice
2. letter to ask for support
3. drama (story)
4. argumentative

1991

1. story
2. article: give suggestions
3. letter: give comment
4. argumentative

1992

1. picture: descriptive
2. article: comment
3. argumentative
4. choose options and explain

1993

1. picture
2. argumentative
3. story
4. choose and explain

1994

1. argumentative
2. picture: descriptive
3. descriptive
4. letter-argumentative

1995

1. letter: argumentative
2. pictures: descriptive
3. choose and explain
4. choose and explain

1996

1. choose and explain
2. story
3. complaint letter

1997

1. letter giving advice
2. story
3. descriptive

1998

1. argumentative
2. descriptive
3. choose and explain

1999

1. choose and explain
2. letter of advice
3. descriptive

2000

1. story
2. argumentative
3. choose and explain

2001

1. story
2. letter: descriptive
3. letter: advice


2002

1. argumentative
2. choose and explain
3. love letter(advice)

2003

1. descriptive
2. argumentative
3. story

2004

1. descriptive
2. letter: give suggestions
3. story

2005

1. descriptive
2. argumentative
3. story

2006

1. story
2. descriptive
3. argumentative

2007

Short: story
Long1: choose and explain
Long 2: argumentative

2008

Short:: choose and explain
Long 1: descriptive
Long 2: argumentative


分題目種類

Story: 88.1, 89.1, 89.3, 90.3, 91.1, 93.1, 93.3, 96.2, 97.2, 00.1, 01.1, 03.3, 04.3, 05.3, 08.1, 07.S

Descriptive: 88.2, 88.4, 92.1, 94.2, 94.3, 95.2, 97.3, 98.2, 99.3, 01.2, 03.1, 04.1, 05.1, 08.2, 08.L1

Argumentative: 88.3, 90.4, 91.4, 92.3, 93.2, 94.1, 94.4, 95.1, 98.1, 00.2, 02.1, 03.2, 05.2, 08.3, 07.L2, 08.L2

Letter/advice giving advice (from high to low): 90.1, 91.2, 97.1, 99.2,

Letter/advice giving suggestion (from low to high): 01.3, 04.2

Letter/advice giving comment: 91.3, 92.2

Chose options and explain: 89.1, 90.2, 92.4, 93.4, 95.3, 95.4, 96.1, 98.3, 99.1, 00.3, 02.2, 07.L1, 08.S

Reporting: 89.4

Complaint letter: 96.3

Love letter: 02.3

HKCEE past paper-writing 1998-2008

改會考writing卷

今年出去MARK會考WRITING卷, 以下是我的學習:


(每part最高6分,共四part: content, language, organisation, genre．最高24分)

1.關於 marking scheme

Content可以俾的COMMENT:

-interesting article. Fulfils tasks completely. Imaginative anecdote. (6)

-variety of points well developed. Relaying personal experience. But lacks real interest/ humor of magazine article (5)

-fulfils tasks. Clear premise established. Ends clearly. Lack real interest/humor for magazine(5)

-fulfils tasks-personal experience leading to conclusion-lacks in real interest/humor of mag article (4)

-variety of points well-developed. All relevant except 2^nd last para. (5)

-limited no. of points-partially developed.generally relevant but just of good points-no real personal change. (3)

-irrelevant para. There are ideas in ..but limited and not related to personal change. (2)

-premise of tasks set up by coping prompt. (2)

-difficult to judge. (1)

-inadequate but have 2 or 3 very rudimentary prompts, therefore more than 0. (1)

LANGUAGE可以俾的COMMENT:

-grammatical errors, but slips. Impressive control of wide variety of structures and phrases. Use of vocab for deliberate effect. (6)

-some sophisticated lexis(字). Some repetition. One sentence difficult to understand. (5)

-good use of phrases, but quite frequent errors(4)

-quite frequent errors-switch in tenses affects understanding. Good vocab but not really sophisticated to get five. (4)

-quite frequent errors, but at no point affecting understanding. Vocab tends to be used accurately. (4)

-struggle to make sense of most sentences. V. frequent errors, occasionally good phrase. (3)

-extremely simple repetitive structures, frequent errors but don’t’ affect understanding. Vocab simple. (2)

-even simple sentences have errors very often affecting understanding. Occasional good vocab. (2)

-language severely hamper understanding but occasional easily understandable part, so not 0. (1)

-a series of phrases. No real evidence of ability to construct sentence. (0)

Organisation可以俾的comment:

-overall structure excellent. Additional coda(結尾). Good use of reference nouns and demonstratives. (6)

-overall structure clear. Some good communicate use, but repetitive. Faulty pronoun. (4)

-overall structure good. Some faulty connectives. (4)

-good intro- set up premise. Overall clear chronological structure. Paragraph 5 a bit illogical. Text unfinished. (4)

-discernable paras: intro, body and conclusion. Attempts at topic sentences. Limited connectives used. (3)

-heading generally helps but last one faculty. There is intro and conclusion. Within paras like unconnected sentences. (2)

-intro but vague. Limited use of connectives. (2)

-there are 3 paras. Attempts of connectives. Within para very difficult to understand connectives between sentences. (1)

-a series of notice-like phrases.(0)

GENRE可以俾的COMMENT:

-read like article. Tone informal. Reference to audience and to self. Use of hyperpole (誇張手法) (6)

-strong personal account, but no real indication that this is more an essay than an article (4)

-Reasonably convincing. Direct reference to readers. Interactional, but sometimes inappropriate. (5)

-some seen mga feature-including reference to ……(4)

-overall str. and paras. Clear-though rather simplistic. Some good connectives, other cohesion faulty. (4)

-quite personal. But little evidence of candidates doing anything more than normal essay. (3)

-no real awareness of audience. Though use of headings appropriate. (2)

-no awareness of audience or text type. But rest reads like article more than letter, so 1 or 0. (1)

-no real attempt to create mag article. But does establish role, so not 0. (1)

-no discernable features or audience awareness for us to understand. (0)

2. 關於改卷進度

大致上, 1小時可改到20篇. 有時快,可改到30篇. 但多過30篇, 準確度會低些.

3. Good vocab

-affiliate themselves with  (

-unfortunate never comes singly

-a range of

-out of blue

-prerequisite

-in retrospect

-all too (used before an adjective or adverb to emphasize a negative meaning

e.g. The holidays flew by all too quickly. )

-embark on (start sth new)

-call a spade a spade (to say the truth about something, even if it is not polite or pleasant )

-admittedly

-permeate (e.g. Dissatisfaction with the government seems to have permeated every section of society. )

-in hope of

-there is no exaggeration to say …

-ubiquitous (seeming to be in all places)

-irrespective of (without considering; not needing to allow for)

-by and large (when everything about a situation is considered together

e.g. There are a few small things that I don't like about my job, but by and large it's very enjoyable. )

-keep abreast of (to make sure you know all the most recent facts about a subject or situation e.g. I try to keep abreast of any developments.)

-worse still 更糟糕的是

-heighten (to increase or make something increase, especially an emotion or effect

)

-to name a few=for example

-formidable 可怕的 (a formidable task)

-to my despair

-mesmerize (to have someone's attention completely so that they cannot think of anything else )

4. Common grammar mistakes

-we no need to X (we need not/do not need to)

-feel boring X(feel bored)

-discuss aboutX (discuss)

-it was trouble X(it was troublesome)

-feel exciting X ( feel excited)

-give up to buy X (give up buying)

- I won’t late X ( I won’t be late)

5. common spelling mistakes

-image X(imagine )

-nowaday/ now a days X(nowadays)

-I thing that X (I think that)

-sizes X (sides)

-fine X (fine)

-loss e.g I loss a mobile phone. X(lose)

-vedio X (video)

-frist X (first)

-cheat X (chat)

-surface X( surfing)

-contect X (contact)

-convenience X (convenient)

-text X (test)

-readed X (read)

Hong Kong tourist spots

Name: _____________

Class: ________________(    )

S.4 writing revision 1

If you net-friend from Australia comes to Hong kong, which three places will you bring him/her to go? Draw the three places in the boxes below:

Revision on the names of the scenic spots (旅遊景點) in Hong Kong.

迪士尼樂園 ____________ _____________ ________________

海洋公園 ___________________ ___________________

天壇大佛 ___________________ ___________________

廟街 ___________________ ___________________

女人街 ___________________ ___________________

山頂凌霄閣 The  ___________________  ___________________

淺水灣  ___________________  ___________________

青馬大橋  The  ______________  ___________________  ________________

長洲___________________  ___________________

大嶼山___________________  ___________________

尖沙咀_________________ _________________ ___________________

旺角___________________ ___________________

深水埗_________________ __________________ ___________________

中環 The ___________________

油麻地___________________ ___________________ ___________________

Name: _________________

Class: ________________ (   )

S.4 writing revision 2

Now you have decided the three places you will bring your net-friend to go. However, you are not free as you need to go to school. You decided to write him an email to introduce the three places to him/her and tell him/her how to get there.

You can use the following table to summarise the three places you recommend 推介 him/her to go and how to get there.

Places	Why it is worth visiting (為何值得參觀? )	How to get there
1.
2.
3.

Story writing 的分段

Story writing 的分段


1. opening
2. development
3. development
4. development
5. climax
6. resolution 

argumentative essay's structure

arguementative/expository:
 
1. introduction:
 
a. When asked about...., many people say that....but others believe that ...
 
b. When it comes to ...some people believe that ... There is probably some truth in their statement, but I think quite differently.
 
c..... opinions vary widely. Some view ... as ... while others claim that....
 
2. reason paragraph:
 
a. ....can account for....
 
b. among the most convincing reasons cited by people for the ..is
 
  examples:
 
a. take , for example, ....
 
b. take a look at...
 
c. Consider the case of ...
 
d. no one can deny the fact that ....
 
3. conclusion:
 
a. From what has been discussed above, we may conclude that ....
 
b. taking into account of all three factors, we may reasonably draw the conclusion that....
 
c.judging form the above, it is obvious that ....

letter of complaint: samples

u           Example 1:

Question:

One day, you read an advertisement for a newly opened fitness club, Burn Fat Gym, in a magazine. It said the club was the largest fitness centre in Hong Kong, and had first-class equipment and professional trainers. You were eager to slim down so you joined the club the next day. During your first visit, however, you found that the club was not spacious, the facilities were poor, and the trainers were neither professional nor helpful. Now write a letter of complaint to the editor of a local newspaper. Sign your name “Chris Wong”. Do not write any address.

Sample letter:

Dear editor,

I am writing to complain about Burn Fat Gym. I joined the club because of its advertisement on a magazine, saying it was the largest fitness centre in Hong Kong with first-class facilities and professional trainers. Last week, when I visited the club, however, I was extremely disappointed to find that it did not live up to its promises.

First, the centre was not as spacious as I had expected. It was only about the size of half of a basketball court. To the best of my knowledge, its size was not even comparable to that of mid-scale fitness centres in Hong Kong. The lack of space resulted in serious overcrowding and I ended up wasting most of my time waiting in line for the facilities.

Equally disappointing was the facilities. Instead of being first-class, they were poor and inadequate. Some basic fitness facilities such as treadmills and rowing machines were not found in the gym. There were only five cycling machines, which were all occupied at that time, a few rusty dumbbells and some filthy yoga mats scattered on the floor.

My last complaint concerns the “professional” trainers. When I consulted one of the trainers about how to train my muscles with the dumbbells, he told me bluntly that I was overweight and lifting weights would not help. He then recommended I should join a fitness programmer which cost over $10,000. When I said I needed time to think about it, he scorned me and turned away. I felt deeply humiliated.

I hope the club would stop placing misleading advertisement and take immediate actions to improve the situation.

Yours faithfully,

Chris Wong

u           Example 2

Question

You had bought a white leather handbag from a famous chain store. After using it for 2 months, it was torn and you took the bag to the store for free repairing while it was still under warranty. You were told that the bag would be repaired after a month, but you still couldn’t get it back after two months. You went back to the shop, and found that the bag was finally sent back, but without any repair. Besides, you are also totally dissatisfied with the false promise of the staff who claimed to call you back when there was any news about the bag. Write a letter of complaint to the Sales Manager of the chain store to make complaints on the case. Sign your letter “Mary Lam”. Don’t write any address.

Sample letter:

Dear Sir,

I am writing to complain about the poor standard of services of your company. I took a white leather bag to your store for repair but I still cannot get it back after 2 months.

The first thing that concerns me is the poor quality of your product. I have never expected that a leather bag would be torn after merely 2 months of normal everyday uses. It is totally contradictory to what I heard from your staff about the good quality and durability of the products of your company.

Another thing that I would like to complain is the poor follow-up contact of your retail store staff with your customers. I am totally clueless on why your staff would claim to call me for any news about the bag if they had no intention to do so. I feel I was cheated, and my precious time wasted.

My final complaint is about the poor coordination between your retail store and the factory. I am totally puzzled why my bag was sent back to the retail store without any repairing. I would have considered not to have it repaired if I had known that it would taken such a long time.

I have totally lost confidence in your company. I insist that you look into the matter and give me an apology. Besides, I demand that you repair and return my leather bag as soon as possible, or refund me for what I have paid if the bag can no longer be repaired.

Please do take actions and respond to my complaints. Otherwise, I cannot but take this matter to the Consumer Council. Thank you for your attention.

Yours faithfully,

Chris Wong

Other ways to start a complaint letter:

u           I would like to draw your attention to....

u           I am writing to express my dissatisfaction at....

The beginning sentences for the Body:

u           My first complaint is...

u           Another thing that concernes me is...

u           The final thing that makes me dissatisfied is...

Ending for the complaint letter:

u           I would like you to refund the full price that I paid...

u           I demand that you replace a new one to me....

u           If you don't do so, I shall take this matter to the Consumer Council....

u           Unless you give me an explanation for the matter, I shall write a letter about this to the newspaper.